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Lets Talk "A Short Trip"

It has come to my attention that my short story that I posted back in 2013, "A Short Trip", has the most views on my page. I decided to make a post about it. Near the end of 2013 I had posted a lot of stories and was doing a lot of writing (e.g. "Roommates", "A Short Trip", "The Point") while also attending school. It was a good year for me on Blogger. "A Short Trip" is one of those stories that I just sat down and started writing one day. I did no brainstorming whatsoever and honestly I don't know how I came about writing it. It is also one of my stories that has a graphic scene in it and should come with my Warning! label that I talked about in my previous post. I don't know if that's one of the reasons it's mostly viewed or what. But the story is rather interesting and does take a turn that is unexpected. The main character is Derek who is also the narrator. In the beginning the story follows Derek and Shan, who is Derek's boyfriend. Like I had mentioned, there is a very short sex scene in the story between Derek and Shan. After the sex scene you find out that something is a little off with their relationship. Then enters Evan, my favorite type of character to write about. I know for a fact that I had fun writing his dialogue. Evan is Derek's friend and we later find out that he's gay as well, the narrator didn't even know that. Evan comes to Derek with an invitation to go see his father in Section 3. The story takes place in Section 1. Between these two is Section 2. I guess I wanted to make a short story that brings us back to what goes on in Section 2. Evan and Derek drive through but encounter paranormal activity. This is where the story changes its tone. Section 2 is a little funny because not every character that I write about who goes through Section 2 is going to experience paranormal activity. There are buses that drive perfectly fine through the city with no problem. People can still stay and live there without experiencing too much of this. It's a matter of what I want to show and tell you. In this case I gave an extreme account that it left the characters scared and frightened. Evan and Derek end up stranded in the unfamiliar city and just want to find their way back home. They do but come across a few ghosts on the way. Then the story takes another turn of events when they get back home and Shan catches Derek and Evan kissing. Bugged story, right? What the hell was I thinking, right? We later find out that Shan has been cheating on Derek! This story is doing too much, I realize, but it is the most bizarre and most read story on my page.

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